His Screams Fill The Night

[daylyn]

Here's my first 100-word drabble. It was written with arrmaitee.


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His Screams Fill The Night

by

Daylyn

His screams fill the night.

The boy lies in the infirmary, pale in the moonlight; his lightening-shaped scar bleeding dark red.

Albus senses my approach. “Severus, how are…?” he falters.

I gaze into his cold, opaque eyes. I want to cry out… to make him taste Lupin’s spattered blood and witness my lover’s silent stoic stare as I bludgeoned him in service to the Dark Lord.

“Fine, Headmaster,” I reply instead.

“Severus,” he utters uneasily. “I didn’t mean…”

I walk away, unwilling to hear his false platitudes. He will never understand.

Only the screaming boy and I know the pain.

Comments

[x-ariadne-x.livejournal.com]

Wow .... just...wow!

[miss-serpentine.livejournal.com]

Oooh! Very nice! The imagery is very well done.

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I really should be working on other things, but this just came to me in the shower (disturbing, huh), and I just had to write it instead.

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[x-ariadne-x.livejournal.com]

you must have a very dark mind, lol. but I know what you mean, sometimes things just kinda pop into your head, and that was very good to come up with!! and for something so short, it's pretty powerful!

So few words ....

[legacylady.livejournal.com]

... but SO MUCH raw emotion packed into them!! WELL DONE!! I had to read it twice to let it sink in - the sadness and pain Snape must have felt.

Kudos!!!

Re: So few words ....

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I just had to stop doing everything else until I had this written. I'm glad you enjoyed it. (And I agree, poor Snape; he's forced to repress his screams and his pain)

[celtic-phantasm.livejournal.com]

Wow. Very short but very powerful. Fantastic job.

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Thank you so very much!

[arrmaitee.livejournal.com]

This is absolutely outstanding. In 100 words, you've conveyed more emotion than most authors do in novel length fanfics. Bravo!

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Well, thank you! There's a lot of pain packed in there. And anguish. Poor Snape.

[babydyke1319.livejournal.com]

I just spent the last hour watching a Documentary about Cannibalistic serial killers, and it didn't make me ill.

I read this, and it made me cry and want to vomit.

I praise you. This was fantastic.

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Umm...thanks (I think).

I know what you mean, though. The piece disturbs me as well. I have know idea where it came from, but I was compelled to write it.

[partitioning.livejournal.com]

Pointed here by armaitee...
Raw emotion... I like the last line a lot.

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Thank you! It is pretty raw, isn't it...

[jupluna.livejournal.com]

Wow....thats all I can really say.

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

"Wow" says a lot. Thanks!

[shimaspawn.livejournal.com]

You managed to convey an amazing amount of emotion with a tiny amount of words. Kudos to you.

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Thank you. There is quite a lot of emotion there, and I think the fact that no one expresses it is what makes the piece so compelling.

[arrmaitee.livejournal.com]

So what do you think of my new Janet icon?

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Lovely icon. So that's what was broadcast (do you know, I never actually saw the picture before). The performance was so contrived, wasn't it.

But it makes for quite the LJ icon. Nice photoshopping (look, I created a new word. Yay!

[arrmaitee.livejournal.com]

I can't believe I haven't seen it iconned before. It's perfect for an icon!

[little-sun.livejournal.com]

poors...
moving...

[daylyn.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[little-sun.livejournal.com]

Oh God, your Crookshanks icon is COOLish thing ever!

Lol, writing something else (longer)?